It is dark,
seemingly impenetrable.
the end of the stick enters the mass.
pushing a little further enables the stick to begin stirring.
peering into the morass
there is nothing to be seen
a sense of deep fear, of dread emanates
from the dark.
agitate a little more
the fear intensifies
almost tangible
in the darkest deepest corner
two round terrified eyes
stare back.


11 responses

  1. Eyeballing those eyes is a good place to begin Jill. Knowing that the other party is as frightened helps. I believe we have to enter the dark space to find the real light.

    1. Oh exactly – it is a small piece of stream of consciousness writing – seemed it was right to expose though 🙂

  2. OMG! That last line made me jumped (figuratively). I wasn’t expecting that. These words are a powerful description of what we experience everyday when we step out the front door.

  3. Wow! This is good. And the way it is written…excellent. Finding our way through the darkness is a frightening occupation, but we all do it at one time or another…too often.


  4. You really took me into the dark, Jill! Even though I’m doing the ghost hunting thing, something like that would scare the crap out of me!

    It sounds like most things that are in the dark are just as terrified as we are!

  5. Yes sometimes the spark is found in the dark
    and the light in the night…. oops I am rhyming…
    As i read it I was picturing that experience of entering the unknown and wondering who the eyes belonged to, and who had the stick…

  6. Powerful words and a great start!

  7. I like the way you have written this – it’s a very powerful beginning.

  8. And who is afraid of whom, here? Love the imagery.

  9. we peer into the dark and find our shadows/ourselves

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